It would be fun to replace the use of “see,” “hear,” and “feel” as words for comprehension, and use “smell” and “taste” instead.

While “young adult” fiction seems best targeted to an audience of generic 16-year olds, it sounds oddly like it was written by a committee of 12-year olds. Not that I mean that it’s “bad” or “bad for” anyone, just that it’s badly written, with inane conceits and botched composition.